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[verhaal] Harry Potter and the Death Chamber *SPOILERS*

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Chapter 1: The Farewell

They were all standing on the roof of Hogwarts’ Astronomy Tower: Albus Dumbledore, Headmaster of the school, cornered by six Death Eaters including Severus Snape and Draco Malfloy. Harry Potter was watching the scene from under his Invisibility Cloak, Frozen only a few moments before.
Dumbledore looked completely exhausted, begging Snape.
‘Severus … Please …’
But to Harry’s horror, Snape lifted his wand, pointed it directly at Dumbledore’s heart and shouted: ‘Avada Kedavra!’
Dumbledore was hit in the chest by the jet of green light that had emerged from Snape’s wand. He was blasted into the air and fell slowly backwards off the battlements.
Harry screamed and found himself sitting up straight in his bed; he wasn’t at Hogwarts, but in his bedroom in the house of his aunt and uncle in number 4, Privet Drive.
His pyjamas were soaked with his own cold sweat. Harry was shaking from lightning-scarred head to toe.
It was that very same Killing Curse that had given Harry the lightning-shaped scar on his forehead when Lord Voldemort had tried to kill him almost sixteen years ago.
Only then, the Curse had bounced off, almost killing Voldemort.
But then, more than a month ago, this Curse had killed Albus Dumbledore, Headmaster of Hogwarts’ School of Witchcraft and Wizardry.
Ever since, Harry had had this dream every night. Always just lying there. Always seeing Dumbledore being killed. It was as though his brain wanted to punish him for weakening him that very same evening, by letting him drink a potion in which lay a very valuable thing – one of Voldemort’s Horcruxes.

Harry was tired of having these dreams. With a sigh, he got out of bed and walked over to his open window. There was still some fog hanging over the country – the Dementors were still multiplying – but that didn’t got rid of the heat.
Very few people came out these days, if it wasn’t for the heat, is was for the threatening danger that hung over the whole country like the fog. Although the Muggles didn’t know anything about the Wizarding World, let alone they would know about a Dark wizard named Lord Voldemort, whose name nobody dared to speak out loud.

When Harry went back to bed, he heard a familiar soaring sound. He jumped over his bed and looked out of the window. The sky was dotted with its many stars and straight ahead of him, Harry saw the silhouet of an owl approaching.
‘Hedwig!’, he said, surprised. He hadn’t expected her until tomorrow evening.
‘You’ve got an answer?”, Harry asked hopefully. Sitting on his arm, she stretched out her left leg, so Harry could take the note. He sat down on the bed and opened the letter.


Harry,

If it’s okay by you, we will come and get you at your aunt and uncle’s house. If it’s not okay by you – well, we’ll come and get you anyway. We will be there at 8 pm. Make sure all your things are packed.

See you tomorrow,

Lupin


Suddenly, Harry felt weird. This was his last night at the Dursleys’ house. His last night – ever. Tomorrow he would turn seventeen and in the Wizarding world, at that age, you are officially an adult. And that meant he didn’t have to live with the Dursleys anymore.
But where he would stay after today? He didn’t know.

When Harry woke up the next morning, he saw the letter from Luping lying on his bedside table. And again, he felt that same weird feeling. He wouldn’t miss the Dursleys, but still, they were his only family left.
As he went downstairs, he promised himself he wouldn’t forget to tell the Dursleys he would leave tonight, like he had done last year.
He entered the kitchen and said good morning to Aunt Petunia, who was frying the bacon, Uncle Dursley, who sat at the dining table, hiding behind his newspaper, and his nephew Dudley, who sat on his chair (which was too small, so both sides of his buttocks stuck out, almost letting disappear the chair) with his fork in one hand and his knife in his other; screaming: ‘What’s taking you so long? I want my bacon!’
Harry sat down and poored in a glass of orange juice, which was taken by Dudley, so he filled another one for himself.
He cleared his throat when they were all four seated at the square table.
‘Ehm … I’m leaving tonight’, he began. Nobody seemed to listen. ‘I said I’m leaving – definitely’, he added, as loud as possible.
That word seemed to work on the Dursleys. Uncle Vernon looked up from his paper, staring at Harry, Aunt Petunia sprinkled the table with the coffee she had been drinking, and Dudley just looked at him, eyes wide open, a strap of bacon dangling out of his mouth.
‘Y-you are?’, Aunt Petunia muttered.
‘Of course he is!’, Uncle Vernon shouted, though it wasn’t as convincing as it always was.
Dudley was still staring at him, now dropping the strap of bacon.
‘Yeah, I am. Lupin – an old friend of my dad – is coming. He said I’d have to pack all of my stuff.’
‘Oh’, Aunt Petunia sighed.
Harry drank his juice and stood up from his seat. He was too excited to eat.
‘Well, I’m going to pack. Got a lot of work to do.’ He didn’t know why he added that last thing.
But when he had reached the kitchen door, Aunt Petunia made a feeble attempt to clear her throat. ‘Eh … Harry?’, she said weakly.
Harry stepped back a few paces so he faced his aunt.
‘Yeah?’
‘Eh … happy birthday’, she said even more weakly, but she managed to show him a little smile.
Harry was stunned.
This was the first time in sixteen years somebody in this house had wished him a happy birthday.

Harry finished packing at 6 p.m. It wasn’t like packing for Hogwarts, not at all. This time he had to take everything. Everything within his bedroom he owned (and, he had to be honest, also a couple of Dudley’s old things he had nicked in the last couple of years). It was very weird to see his bedroom like this: no self-repaired alarm clock on his bedside table, no pictures of his parents on the walls, nothing.

After two hours waiting, finally, he heard the doorbell ring. He ran out of his room, jumped off the stairs, but somebody had already opened the door. Aunt Petunia.
‘Good evening, Petunia’, Lupin said politely.
‘Good evening, Remus.’
Harry stared at Aunt Petunia. She knew him? He knew her?
When Lupin caught sight of Harry, he smiled broadly.
‘Harry! How are you? Got everything packed?’
‘Yeah, I think so …’, he muttered.
Aunt Petunia proceeded to the living room and Lupin and Harry followed them.
‘Sit down, sit down’, she offered. She was obviously more comfortable than that morning. ‘Do you want anything to drink? Glass of wine? Beer?’
Lupin thought a few seconds and then said: ‘I’ll have a glass of red wine. What about you, Harry?’ he looked over to him, very relaxed. ‘This is your last evening in this house, I’d better enjoy it!’
Enjoy it? Enjoy it? Like he had ever enjoyed an evening at the Dursleys’ house!
‘I’ll just have a coke, thanks’, he said politely.
What was this all about? Where were Dudley and Uncle Vernon? Why was Aunt Petunia so politely? Were they, finally, after sixteen years, accepting that Harry was in their house?
Aunt Petunia brought a tray with three drinks and a scale with potato chips.
‘To which honour are we drinking? That I’m finally leaving, after sixteen years?’ Harry heard himself ask with a voice as sharp as a knife.
Aunt Petunia looked like she had just been hit in the face.
‘W-well, this is your last evening here, right?’ she said uncertainly.
It was a very weird evening. Lupin and Aunt Petunia talked half an hour, about ordinary things – the weather, for example.
But after that, everything they could talk about, had already been talked about and a silence fell.
Then, Lupin began to speak again.
‘So, Harry. You ready?’, he asked.
‘Yeah, all my bags are upstairs in my room. Shall I get them?’
‘That would be a good idea. In the meantime, I’ll wait here with Petunia, we still have some things to say.’
Not understanding what Lupin could possibly mean, Harry ran upstairs and carried the bags downstairs. It took him 15 minutes to bring all four bags downstairs. When he entered the living room, Lupin and Aunt Petunia were sitting in a two person-sofa, facing each other, both looking a little bit tense.
Harry cleared his throat to announce his presence and said: ‘Er – Lupin? I’m ready.’
Confused, Lupin stood up and looked at Harry. ‘Of course. We’ll send these straight to the Headquarters.’ He tapped the pile of bags and trunks two times with his wand and instantly, they disappeared all four.
‘The Headquarters? There’s a new Headquarter?’, Harry asked, amazed. But Lupin just ignored him and walked back into the living room. He faced Petunia.
‘So … I guess this is it …’, he said, a little bit uncomfortable.
‘I guess so’, Harry said, at least as uncomfortable as Lupin.
Aunt Petunia stood there and watched Harry. He could se her eyes getting wetter and wetter. She pulled out a white handkerchief and blew her nose.
‘Oh Harry … you’re always welcome here’ – Harry doubted that – ‘and forgive me the times I’ve been nasty and mean to you’ – why should he? – ‘and … oh!’
She began to cry. Harry stood there, pinned to the floor. Aunt Petunia? Crying? This couldn’t be happening. This was probably just one of his nasty dreams.
But it wasn’t.
Seconds later, Aunt Petunia hugged Harry so tightly, she reminded him at Mrs Weasley.
Uneasy, he put his arms around her back, too.
And then, they let loose.
‘Come on, Harry, it’s time to go’, Lupin said softly.
‘Bye, Aunt Petunia. Thanks for all the years you let me live here.’ He couldn’t help feeling a bit sad too.
She stood in front of the door and waved at him while they walked the street.
Finally, when they were out of sight, Lupin talked again.
‘Now, Harry, I don’t think it’s safe to let you Apparate on your own. Just grab my arm tight and hold on, okay?’
‘But where are we go – ‘, he began, but Lupin interrupted him. ‘Later, Harry. Just do what I say.’
Harry grabbed hold of Lupin’s right upper arm with his left hand, just as he had done a year before with Dumbledore. But the thought of Dumbledore made his eyes prickling and wet. He grabbed Lupin’s upper arm more tightly.
‘You ready?’
Harry pinched with his left hand and nodded.
‘Hold on, here we go.’
All of a sudden, the Privet Drive was replaced by darkness. Harry felt a huge pressure on every single part of his body and he couldn’t breathe. And then, as quick as it had come, the darkness was replaced by a new scene. A quite familiar scene …
They stood in the middle of a place, surrounded by houses with broken windows, houses with paint peeling of the front door, and houses where the trash bags were piled up so high you couldn’t even get to the front door.
They were back at number 12, Grimmauld Place.

Als er spelfouten in staan, houd er dan wel rekening mee dat ik niet Engels ben ofzo
Maar ik wil wel commentaar over het schrijven en de inhoud
Laatst bijgewerkt door Sjoert op 16-09-05 08:10, in het totaal 2 keer bewerkt
Reden: [tag] in titel gezet, voortaan zelf aan denken aub

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Re: Harry Potter and the Death Champer *SPOILERS*

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MIEN JE BENT GE-WEL-DIG

Zo

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Re: Harry Potter and the Death Champer *SPOILERS*

Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 05-08-05 19:16

Whaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa

*juicht

Zit nu HELEMAAL in hp fase na deel 6 en dit komt mooi uit aangezien ik deel 6 voor de 2de keer al uit heb

*Ik ga zo printen.


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Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 05-08-05 19:22

Ships, nu weet ik wie er doodgaat in boek 6...

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Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 05-08-05 19:36

Er staat ook; Spoilers

Ja is idd wat gevaarlijk dat het meteen bovenin staat mja.. Het staat duidelijk in de titel

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Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 05-08-05 19:41

Oh ik verwijt de TS ook niks hoor
Had er alleen een beetje overheen gelezen, ik zag HP en klikte meteen

[edit] trouwens erg goed geschreven
Ik zou doorgaan, al volg ik het niet meer, vanwege het feit dat ik boek 6 nog niet heb gelezen. Als ik hem wel uit heb zoek ik dit topic weer op

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Re: Harry Potter and the Death Champer *SPOILERS*

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En en en, Kana, hoe vind je 'm?

Natasja, ik ga er zeker mee door, hoor, ik heb al de helft van het verhaal uitgedacht

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Geweldig!!!!! Oh, heerlijk om wat door te lezen na boek 6!! Zo goed gescheven, het sluit er echt super op aan... En oh, ben nu al helemaal benieuwd naar het gevolg!

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Danku, danku
Ik begin vandaag aan een nieuw hoofdstuk, maar ik weet niet of ik er meteen een af krijg, gisteren leek ik wel gehypnotiseerd en typte ik aan 200 per uur

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Vind het echt super!

het regent dus had weer wat te doen

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Mientjeuh schreef:

Chapter 1: The Farewell


They were all standing on the roof of Hogwarts’ Astronomy Tower: Albus Dumbledore, Headmaster of the school, cornered by six Death Eaters including Severus Snape and Draco Malfloy. Harry Potter was watching the scene from under his Invisibility Cloak, Frozen only a few moments before.
Dumbledore looked completely exhausted, begging Snape.
‘Severus … Please …’
But to Harry’s horror, Snape lifted his wand, pointed it directly at Dumbledore’s heart and shouted: ‘Avada Kedavra!’
Dumbledore was hit in the chest by the jet of green light that had emerged from Snape’s wand. He was blasted into the air and fell slowly backwards off the battlements.
Harry screamed and found himself sitting up straight in his bed; he wasn’t at Hogwarts, but in his bedroom in the house of his aunt and uncle in number 4, Privet Drive.
His pyjamas were soaked with his own cold sweat. Harry was shaking from lightning-scarred head to toe.
It was that very same Killing Curse that had given Harry the lightning-shaped scar on his forehead when Lord Voldemort had tried to kill him almost sixteen years ago. Ik denk dat je seventeen bedoelt?
Only then, the Curse had bounced off, almost killing Voldemort.
But then, more than a month ago, this Curse had killed Albus Dumbledore, Headmaster of Hogwarts’ School of Witchcraft and Wizardry.
Ever since, Harry had had this dream every night. Always just lying there. Always seeing Dumbledore being killed. It was as though his brain wanted to punish him for weakening him that very same evening, by letting him drink a potion in which lay a very valuable thing – one of Voldemort’s Horcruxes.

Harry was tired of having these dreams. With a sigh, he got out of bed and walked over to his open window. There was still some fog hanging over the country – the Dementors were still multiplying – but that didn’t got rid of the heat.
Very few people came out these days, if it wasn’t for the heat, is was for the threatening danger that hung over the whole country like the fog. Although the Muggles didn’t know anything about the Wizarding World, let alone they would know about a Dark wizard named Lord Voldemort, whose name nobody dared to speak out loud.

When Harry went back to bed, he heard a familiar soaring sound. He jumped over his bed and looked out of the window. The sky was dotted with its many stars and straight ahead of him, Harry saw the silhouet of an owl approaching.
‘Hedwig!’, he said, surprised. He hadn’t expected her until tomorrow evening.
‘You’ve got an answer?”, Harry asked hopefully. Sitting on his arm, she stretched out her left leg, so Harry could take the note. He sat down on the bed and opened the letter.


Harry,

If it’s okay by you, we will come and get you at your aunt and uncle’s house. If it’s not okay by you – well, we’ll come and get you anyway. We will be there at 8 pm. Make sure all your things are packed.

See you tomorrow,

Lupin


Suddenly, Harry felt weird. This was his last night at the Dursleys’ house. His last night – ever. Tomorrow he would turn seventeen and in the Wizarding world, at that age, you are officially an adult. And that meant he didn’t have to live with the Dursleys anymore.
But where he would stay after today? He didn’t know.

When Harry woke up the next morning, he saw the letter from Luping lying on his bedside table. And again, he felt that same weird feeling. He wouldn’t miss the Dursleys, but still, they were his only family left.
As he went downstairs, he promised himself he wouldn’t forget to tell the Dursleys he would leave tonight, like he had done last year.
He entered the kitchen and said good morning to Aunt Petunia, who was frying the bacon, Uncle Dursley, who sat at the dining table, hiding behind his newspaper, and his nephew Dudley, who sat on his chair (which was too small, so both sides of his buttocks stuck out, almost letting disappear the chair) with his fork in one hand and his knife in his other; screaming: ‘What’s taking you so long? I want my bacon!’
Harry sat down and poored in a glass of orange juice, which was taken by Dudley, so he filled another one for himself.
He cleared his throat when they were all four seated at the square table.
‘Ehm … I’m leaving tonight’,Huh? Maar pm is Past Midnight dus s'morgens? he began. Nobody seemed to listen. ‘I said I’m leaving – definitely’, he added, as loud as possible.
That word seemed to work on the Dursleys. Uncle Vernon looked up from his paper, staring at Harry, Aunt Petunia sprinkled the table with the coffee she had been drinking, and Dudley just looked at him, eyes wide open, a strap of bacon dangling out of his mouth.
‘Y-you are?’, Aunt Petunia muttered.
‘Of course he is!’, Uncle Vernon shouted, though it wasn’t as convincing as it always was.
Dudley was still staring at him, now dropping the strap of bacon.
‘Yeah, I am. Lupin – an old friend of my dad – is coming. He said I’d have to pack all of my stuff.’
‘Oh’, Aunt Petunia sighed.
Harry drank his juice and stood up from his seat. He was too excited to eat.
‘Well, I’m going to pack. Got a lot of work to do.’ He didn’t know why he added that last thing.
But when he had reached the kitchen door, Aunt Petunia made a feeble attempt to clear her throat. ‘Eh … Harry?’, she said weakly.
Harry stepped back a few paces so he faced his aunt.
‘Yeah?’
‘Eh … happy birthday’, she said even more weakly, but she managed to show him a little smile.
Harry was stunned.
This was the first time in sixteen Seventeen? years somebody in this house had wished him a happy birthday.

Harry finished packing at 6 p.m. It wasn’t like packing for Hogwarts, not at all. This time he had to take everything. Everything within his bedroom he owned (and, he had to be honest, also a couple of Dudley’s old things he had nicked in the last couple of years). It was very weird to see his bedroom like this: no self-repaired alarm clock on his bedside table, no pictures of his parents on the walls, nothing.

After two hours waiting, finally, he heard the doorbell ring. He ran out of his room, jumped off the stairs, but somebody had already opened the door. Aunt Petunia.
‘Good evening, Petunia’, Lupin said politely.
‘Good evening, Remus.’
Harry stared at Aunt Petunia. She knew him? He knew her?
When Lupin caught sight of Harry, he smiled broadly.
‘Harry! How are you? Got everything packed?’
‘Yeah, I think so …’, he muttered.
Aunt Petunia proceeded to the living room and Lupin and Harry followed them.
‘Sit down, sit down’, she offered. She was obviously more comfortable than that morning. ‘Do you want anything to drink? Glass of wine? Beer?’
Lupin thought a few seconds and then said: ‘I’ll have a glass of red wine. What about you, Harry?’ he looked over to him, very relaxed. ‘This is your last evening in this house, I’d better enjoy it!’
Enjoy it? Enjoy it? Like he had ever enjoyed an evening at the Dursleys’ house!
‘I’ll just have a coke, thanks’, he said politely.
What was this all about? Where were Dudley and Uncle Vernon? Why was Aunt Petunia so politely? Were they, finally, after sixteen years, accepting that Harry was in their house?
Aunt Petunia brought a tray with three drinks and a scale with potato chips.
‘To which honour are we drinking? That I’m finally leaving, after sixteen years?’ Harry heard himself ask with a voice as sharp as a knife.
Aunt Petunia looked like she had just been hit in the face.
‘W-well, this is your last evening here, right?’ she said uncertainly.
It was a very weird evening. Lupin and Aunt Petunia talked half an hour, about ordinary things – the weather, for example.
But after that, everything they could talk about, had already been talked about and a silence fell.
Then, Lupin began to speak again.
‘So, Harry. You ready?’, he asked.
‘Yeah, all my bags are upstairs in my room. Shall I get them?’
‘That would be a good idea. In the meantime, I’ll wait here with Petunia, we still have some things to say.’
Not understanding what Lupin could possibly mean, Harry ran upstairs and carried the bags downstairs. It took him 15 minutes to bring all four bags downstairs. When he entered the living room, Lupin and Aunt Petunia were sitting in a two person-sofa, facing each other, both looking a little bit tense. Is dit romantisch bedoelt? Dit begreep ik niet helemaal. Maarre als je dit romantisch bedoelde ben je dan niet Tonks vergeten? Het vriendinnetje van Lupin ? Of word dit stukje nog uitgelelgd ooit?
Harry cleared his throat to announce his presence and said: ‘Er – Lupin? I’m ready.’
Confused, Lupin stood up and looked at Harry. ‘Of course. We’ll send these straight to the Headquarters.’ He tapped the pile of bags and trunks two times with his wand and instantly, they disappeared all four.
‘The Headquarters? There’s a new Headquarter?’, Harry asked, amazed. But Lupin just ignored him and walked back into the living room. He faced Petunia.
‘So … I guess this is it …’, he said, a little bit uncomfortable.
‘I guess so’, Harry said, at least as uncomfortable as Lupin.
Aunt Petunia stood there and watched Harry. He could se her eyes getting wetter and wetter. She pulled out a white handkerchief and blew her nose.
‘Oh Harry … you’re always welcome here’ – Harry doubted that – ‘and forgive me the times I’ve been nasty and mean to you’ – why should he? – ‘and … oh!’
She began to cry. Harry stood there, pinned to the floor. Aunt Petunia? Crying? This couldn’t be happening. This was probably just one of his nasty dreams.
But it wasn’t.
Seconds later, Aunt Petunia hugged Harry so tightly, she reminded him at Mrs Weasley.
Uneasy, he put his arms around her back, too.
And then, they let loose.
‘Come on, Harry, it’s time to go’, Lupin said softly.
‘Bye, Aunt Petunia. Thanks for all the years you let me live here.’ He couldn’t help feeling a bit sad too.
She stood in front of the door and waved at him while they walked the street.
Finally, when they were out of sight, Lupin talked again.
‘Now, Harry, I don’t think it’s safe to let you Apparate on your own. Just grab my arm tight and hold on, okay?’
‘But where are we go – ‘, he began, but Lupin interrupted him. ‘Later, Harry. Just do what I say.’
Harry grabbed hold of Lupin’s right upper arm with his left hand, just as he had done a year before with Dumbledore. But the thought of Dumbledore made his eyes prickling and wet. He grabbed Lupin’s upper arm more tightly.
‘You ready?’
Harry pinched with his left hand and nodded.
‘Hold on, here we go.’
All of a sudden, the Privet Drive was replaced by darkness. Harry felt a huge pressure on every single part of his body and he couldn’t breathe. And then, as quick as it had come, the darkness was replaced by a new scene. A quite familiar scene …
They stood in the middle of a place, surrounded by houses with broken windows, houses with paint peeling of the front door, and houses where the trash bags were piled up so high you couldn’t even get to the front door.
They were back at number 12, Grimmauld Place. Is het wel slim om dit hier te doen. bellatrix weet van deze plek. Voldy en alle Death Eaters weten van deze plek?
Als er spelfouten in staan, houd er dan wel rekening mee dat ik niet Engels ben ofzo
Maar ik wil wel commentaar over het schrijven en de inhoud

Dit waren geen spelfouten ofzo. Maar gewoon dingen die mij opvielen.
Het is erg moeilijk om een verhaal van iemand af te schrijven, Want je moet schrijven met de feiten die je al hebt. Daarom kun je beter alles over lezen en kijken of het goed aansluit met het al bestaande verhaal!

edit/ duizend spelfouten in die paar zinnen van mij

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Re: Harry Potter and the Death Champer *SPOILERS*

Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst door de TopicStarter : 06-08-05 13:03

Jahaaaaaaaaaaaaa
16 -> ja, want hij is aangevallen toen hij 1 was en in de Wizarding World word je volwassen als je 17 bent.

Romantisch? Ehh, nee, ik ben Tonks niet vergeten, hoor Geduld

Dat van Grimmauld Place wordt ook nog uitgelegd (ze kan de eigenlijke plaats ook niet verraden aangezien zij de Secret Keeper niet is.)

PM is echt wel 's avonds, ik heb net 3 weken in Amerika doorgebracht Het is iets met post m ... (middag dus).

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Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 06-08-05 13:09

Ja? wat is smorgens dan?

Confused

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Re: Harry Potter and the Death Champer *SPOILERS*

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Oh nee, midnight was het iig 's avonds

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Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 06-08-05 19:40

als ik deel zes uit heb ga ik misschien deze toppic volgen

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Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 06-08-05 20:03

AM is 's morgens

Is post midnight en after midnight dacht ik

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Re: [verhaal] Harry Potter and the Death Champer *SPOILERS*

Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 06-08-05 21:19

Leuk om weer een HP fanfic te lezen. HP6 laat inderdaad veel stof om over na te denken over.
Ook goed dat je het in het engels doet, mag ik vragen waarom? Om de stijl/stemming van het pas uitgekomen boek 6 te behouden?
Jij had toch ook een tijd geleden een topic gestart over Lily en James in hun jeugd (don't shoot me if I'm wrong)? Dat vond ik erg leuk om te lezen, misschien zelfs leuker dan de HP7 wannabe's. Was je daar nog mee verder gegaan dat ik dat gemist heb?

Ik vind je schrijfstijl erg goed, en ook erg gedurfd dat je het in het engels durft te schrijven! Ik kijk uit naar het vervolg!

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Re: [verhaal] Harry Potter and the Death Champer *SPOILERS*

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Ik schrijf in het engels omdat ik dat beter vind klinken

Ja, ik was begonnen met een verhaal over James en Lily, maar daar ben ik mee gestopt ... niet genoeg inspiratie. Maar daar ga ik misschien mee verder

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Re: [verhaal] Harry Potter and the Death Champer *SPOILERS*

Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst door de TopicStarter : 14-09-05 16:09

Na een lange tijd weer een nieuw hoofdstuk
Er staan volgens mij superveel taalfouten, maar ik wou dit hoofdstuk absoluut afhebben, want ik zit vol ideeën voor de volgende. Dus vergeef me dit hoofdstuk

Chapter two: Back again

Harry couldn’t believe it. Hadn’t Dumbledore told him last year that they had vacated the house?
Again, he was tortured by the thought of Dumbledore. His mouth went dry and he felt the tears prickling in his eyes.
‘Here we are, Harry’, Lupin said happily.
‘Grimmauld Place? The Headquarters are at Grimmauld Place?’, he said. He couldn’t believe it. This was the house where his godfather Sirius had been hiding for almost a year. This was the house were he was locked up, where he had fled from when he had come to save Harry and his friends at the Department of Mystification. They couldn’t make Harry get in there. They just couldn’t.
‘Yes it is, Harry’, Lupin said resolute.
There was a brief silence. Then Lupin started talking again. This time in a more comprehending and friendly way.
‘Now listen, Harry. I know this will be difficult for you. It was for me, too. Take your time. I won’t push you. But I do want you in there at midnight’, he added, smiling.
‘Okay’, Harry answered, but he wasn’t sure of his answer.
They started moving towards the houses with numbers 11 and 13. When they stood in front of the hedge between the two houses, suddenly, a third house appeared. It was like a balloon swelling between the two other houses.
They walked the three stone steps. Now they stood in front of a black front door with a silver knocker in the form of a serpent. The door’s black paint was shabby and scratched.
‘Step aside, please, Harry’, Lupin said. As Harry did so, he tapped the door with his wand. For a few moments, everything remained quiet. But then, Harry heard the familiar sound of the many chains and locks unlocking. The door opened and Arthur Weasley stood beaming in the doorway.
“Harry! Good to see you! How are you?”, he asked enthousiastic.
“Fine, thanks. And how are you?”, Harry said, but in his mind he was convincing himself that it would be all right to step inside the house.
Lupin and Mr Weasley were looking at him encouragingly. After a few moments, Harry stepped inside and shook Mr Weasley’s hand.
“Welcome back”, he said with an encouraging smile. Lupin followed him and clapped him on the back. “Well done”, he said.
The hall looked very different from the last time Harry had seen it. It was packed with boxes; there was a little space left open, so you could just reach the stairs leading to the kitchen and the one leading to the first floor.
It was quiet in the house. Too quiet.
The three of them walked to the staircase that led to the kitchen. Lupin’s hand still rested on Harry’s shoulder and he led Harry down the stairs. When they reached the kitchen door, Mr Weasley opened it and Harry was blown away by an eruption of noise.
The kitchen was packed with people and they were all cheering and clapping. Harry recognized his two best friends, Ron Weasley and Hermione Granger, in front of the crowd. Behind them stood Mrs Weasley, Fred and George Weasley and Nymphadora Tonks, all smiling and clapping.
Next to him, Lupin stood smiling broadly, mouthing: “Surprise!”
Harry smiled weakly and tears filled his eyes once again. They didn’t know what it meant to him to see them all, standing there, smiling and clapping.
Ron and Hermione stepped forward. Ron clapped Harry on his back, saying: “Happy birthday, mate!”
Hermione hugged Harry tightly. “Happy birthday, Harry!”, she said cheerfully.
When Harry turned back to he crowd, everybody fell silent. He didn’t knew what to say.
“Thank you … thank you for this wonderful surprise”, Harry said. He hoped the guests didn’t expect a speech. At this moment, Harry was speechless.
Lupin noticed that Harry didn’t know what to say. Somebody in the crowd (probably Mundungus Fletcher) screamed: “Food!” and everybody moved towards a magnificent buffet.
Molly Weasley, mother of the 6 Weasley boys and 1 girl, approached Harry and gave him a hug that almost strangled him. “Oh dear, welcome back! Happy birthday! I hope you enjoy my buffet, I made it just for your birthday!”
“Thanks, Mrs Weasley, it sure looks delicious!”, Harry said. And it was true; one look at the buffet told him Mrs Weasley had done the best she could. There were porkchops, mashed potatoes, stew, and every other plate Harry liked.
Harry followed Mrs Weasley to the tablet packed with plates and scales. He took a little bit of everything and went to sit down on one of the many chairs at the long, wooden table beside Fred, George, Ginny, Ron and Hermione. Fred, George and Ginny wished him a happy birthday. For a second, Harry regretted breaking up with Ginny when he saw how beautiful she was this evening. But then, again, he knew he had made the right decision.
“How’s bussiness going?” Harry asked the twin brothers as he began eating.
“Great!”, Fred replied.
“Yeah, we’ve never been this busy! Fred and I are developing new stuff and we expect it to be a new bestseller”, George added.
Harry grinned. He remembered a new product they had released last summer, called ‘U-No-Poo’.
While they were eating, the twins told them about their latest inventions and ideas. When their plates were empty and their stomachs full, the six of them left the table and joined the others. At least fifteen guests Harry didn’t know, wished him a happy birthday. The pile of gifts grew as the evening progressed.
When everybody had finished eating, the table and chairs were moved aside and Mrs Weasley put on an extremely old gramophone, which played some really funny songs. Everybody started dancing, some guests more enthousiastic than the others.
It was the most wonderfull night ever in Harry’s life. He forgot all his thoughts, talked amused with Fred and George, danced and watched Lupin and Tonks be a happy couple.
At midnight, Fred and George demonstrated their newest fireworks, making everybody clapping and cheering again. Mrs Weasley had exceeded herself again by making an enormous birthday cake. It was build up out of three levels, the first one saying “Happy”, the second one “Birthday” and the third one “Harry!”.

Somewhere at two am, Lupin asked Harry to follow him upstairs. They went to Harry’s bedroom. “I’ve got something for you, Harry”, Lupin began and he leapt over to a drawer. He turned back to Harry with a box in his hands.
“Sirius gave me this”, he said. He put the box next to Harry on the bed and sat down on Harry’s other side.
Harry looked at Lupin and asked: “But … how – how can he have given you this? I mean - ” His eyes went wet again. But he didn’t understand it. How can Sirius have given this to Lupin? Did he know he was going to die that day?
“I can’t tell, Harry. But he said I had to give this to you in person. I didn’t have the chance the past year.”
Harry didn’t answer. He was thinking. Had Sirius known he was going to die?
“I’m going back downstairs. You coming?”, Lupin said as he rose from the bed.
“Yeah, don’t want to miss the fun”, Harry said and he walked through the door, held open by Lupin. Together they went back downstairs.
The party went on until three in the morning. Harry and Ron went to their bedroom and fell asleep immediately. It had been a wonderful evening. Harry couldn’t wish for a better comeback at Grimmauld Place.
For the past year, Harry had thought how he would feel when he was back here. But he had always thought wrong. It wasn’t that bad. The memories of Sirius were still there, fresh and torturing, but Harry could live with it.

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Re: [verhaal] Harry Potter and the Death Champer *SPOILERS*

Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 14-09-05 16:58

Super Mien!! en nu wil ik weten wat er in die doos zit

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Re: [verhaal] Harry Potter and the Death Champer *SPOILERS*

Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 14-09-05 18:57

SUPER geschreven , IK kom er weer helemaal in Het verhaal. Heb sinds een paar weken HP 6 uit, dus ik blijf dit zeker volgen, wacht met smart op het volgende stuk . Ow ja de stukken zijn lekker lang dus dat leest makkelijk ga hier vooral mee door

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Re: [verhaal] Harry Potter and the Death Champer *SPOILERS*

Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst door de TopicStarter : 14-09-05 19:40

Danku

Ja, ik plaats ze liever per hoofdstuk, dan word ik niet beïnvloed door commentaar van anderen, het is nog altijd mijn verhaal Maar ik heb echt superveel ideeën, dus op naar het volgende hoofdstuk!

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Re: [verhaal] Harry Potter and the Death Champer *SPOILERS*

Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 14-09-05 20:25

Leuk weer een nieuw deel.

Ik hoop dat op- en aanmerkingen welkom zijn ? Ik zal niets zeggen over de taalfouten, ik vind het al super geschreven voor iemand die eigenlijk helemaal geen engels spreekt.
Waarom is Harry zo geshockeerd dat Grimmauld Place nog steeds als Headquaters dient? Dumbledore had geloof ik in het 6e boek aan harry gevraagd of ze Grimmauld place nog steeds als headquaters konden gebruiken. Hier stemde Harry mee in.
En Lupin heb ik me trouwens altijd als een rustige, eenzame man beschouwd die zich niet zo snel bond aan iemand. Dit legde hij ook Tonks uit, toen ze over hun relatie sproken. Nu is hij ineens wel erg close met Harry. Ik zou zeggen dat je een beetje veel Sirius in Lupin hebt verwerkt, als je snapt wat ik bedoel.

Ik kan het uiteraard ook verkeerd hebben. En jij bent de schrijfster, jij beslist wat in het verhaal komt daar heb ik niets over te zeggen. Trek je dan vooral niet van mij aan, ik bedoel het ook helemaal niet kwaad!

Ik zal wachten op het volgende stukje, ben erg nieuwsgierig! Hoop dat ik wel wat minder lang hoef te wachten .

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Re: [verhaal] Harry Potter and the Death Champer *SPOILERS*

Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 14-09-05 21:05

Weeral geweldig! Dat was het wachten wel waard! Wcht vol spanning op het volgende hoofdstuk Ben ook benieuwd wat er in die Box zit!

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Re: [verhaal] Harry Potter and the Death Champer *SPOILERS*

Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 15-09-05 07:59

woooww super geschreven!! je engels is ook heel goed, zitten maar weinig foutjes in

we want more, we want more *o/*