[verhaal] Harry Potter and the Death Chamber *SPOILERS*

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Chapter 3: Godric’s Hollow

Harry woke up the next morning at noon. A look at Ron’s bed told him he was already downstairs. Harry put on his clothes and went downstairs to the kitchen. Hermione, Ron, Ginny, Fred, George, Mrs Weasley and Tonks were already sitting at the table.
‘Morning’, Harry said as he sat down, too.
‘M’ning’, Tonk yawned.
Mrs Weasley offered Harry a plate with sausages, scrambled eggs and toast.
‘Thanks, Mrs Weasley’, Harry said and he started eating.
‘Where is Remus, Tonks?’, Mrs Weasley asked.
‘Oh, he got off early this morning, said he had some business to do. I think he’ll be back in an hour.’
By hearing the name, Harry remembered something he wanted to ask Lupin.
When he had finished eating, Harry went back upstairs to his room. He would pack out some stuff while he would wait for Lupin to come back.
His trunk was standing in a corner of the room, waiting for Harry to pack it out.
Slowly, Harry leapt over to a big drawer, opened its doors and heaved his trunk on his bed. He didn’t really feel like unpacking, but there was nothing else he could do in this house until Lupin came back.
While he was putting some socks in the right drawer, Harry thought how he could ask Lupin.
And just then, he heard the smash of the front door. Harry ran out of the room, jumped off the stairs and stood face to face with Lupin.
‘Harry! What’s the hurry?’, he asked, somewhat surprised.
‘Erm, Lupin – can I ask you something? It’s kind of – kind of important to me’, Harry asked.
‘Sure! Let’s go and sit somewhere.’ Lupin walked over to the stairs that led to the kitchen, but Harry said, louder than meant: ‘No! I – I want to ask it in private.’
‘Oh, okay. Let’s go to the drawing room, is that OK by you?’
‘Yeah, I think so.’
Together they climbed the stairs leading to the first floor, walked down the hall and entered a room at their left. The room contained six or seven cardboard boxes and two old armchairs.
Lupin crossed the room and sat down in a chair. Harry did the same and looked at his knees, trying to avoid Lupin’s eyes.
‘Shoot.’
‘Well, er … it’s just that – I’ve always wanted to go back to Godric’s Hollow’, Harry said at once.
Lupin said nothing, but he didn’t look surprised either. After a brief silence, he sighed.
‘“I’ve been waiting for you to ask this question ever since I met you’, he said.
Harry was surprised to hear this. ‘Really?’
‘Yes. It’s normal you want to go back, and I really understand it. But please, Harry, don’t underestimate this.’
‘I’m not. But – I wanted to ask you if … if you wanted to come with me’, Harry muttered.
Now, Lupin did seem surprised. Then he smiled.
‘Of course I want to come with you.’
‘Really?’, Harry said. Lupin probably didn’t know how much this meant to Harry.
‘It’s up to me to do it, isn’t it? Now Sirius and Dumbledore aren’t there anymore …’ Lupin fell silent. Harry started staring at his knees. Then, Lupin spoke again.
‘What about tomorrow? Is that okay by you?’
Harry was surprised. He hadn’t planned the trip until next week, but he agreed.

That evening, Harry didn’t sleep well. He couldn’t stop thinking about his parents and Sirius. He wondered how his life would have looked like if they all would have been here.
Harry awoke after three hours of sleep at eight o’clock in the morning. Since he couldn’t sleep anymore, he jumped out his bed, dressed and tiptoed out the room, leaving a loudly snoring Ron behind.
When he entered the kitchen, to his surprise, Mrs Weasley and Lupin were already sitting at the table. Mrs Weasley was pooring in two cups of coffee and looked up when Harry came in.
‘Oh dear, are you already awake?’, she asked.
‘Yeah, couldn’t really sleep’, Harry said and he yawned.
‘Here, have a cup of coffee’, Mrs Weasley said as she passed the other filled mug to Harry. ‘Do you want something to eat? Eggs? Toast? Bacon?’, she asked.
‘Just a piece of toast, please.’
There was a brief silence (except from Mrs Weasley, who was preparing Harry’s breakfast) and then Lupin spoke.
‘So, are you ready, Harry?’, he asked softly.
‘I – I think so …’, Harry answered, but he wasn’t sure of his answer. ‘When are we leaving?’
‘Whenever you want’, Lupin said with a smile.
‘Here you go, dear’, Mrs Weasley said and she put in front of him a plate with two slices of toast, three jars of jam and a plate with some butter.
But even with some of Mrs Weasley’s best jam, the toast tasted like cardboard.
When Harry had finished his toasts and Lupin’s mug was empty, they both stood up.
‘So, we’d better go then’, said Lupin.
‘Okay’, Harry said. But he had forgotten something. ‘Er – Lupin? Do you have any Muggle money?’
‘Got everything.’ Lupin clapped with his hand on the pocket of his pants.
In silence, the three of them went back upstairs. When they had reached the front door, Mrs Weasley hugged Harry.
‘Good luck, dear.’
Harry nodded but didn’t speak.
‘See you later, Molly’, said Lupin. He opened the door and they stepped into the fresh air.
‘We’re going to King’s Cross’, Lupin informed Harry. ‘There’s a train every half an hour. If we’re lucky, we can take the one at nine o’clock.’
Harry checked his watch; half past eight.
They walked in silence. Twenty minutes later, they reached the train station.
Since Lupin wasn’t used to Muggle money, Harry paid their tickets. He checked his watch again; they only had five more minutes. They arrived just in time, their train had just arrived.
Five minutes later, the train was gaining speed and Harry and Lupin were sitting opposite each other, silently watching outside. Just then, Harry remembered something.
‘I just remembered – I forgot to tell Hermione and Ron where we are going.’
Lupin smiled. ‘No problem, I’ve got it all arranged.’
Harry was Lupin very grateful for that. He couldn’t picture himself telling his two best friends that he was going to Godric’s Hollow without asking them to accompany him.
It was another five minutes and the voice coming out of the speakers told them they had arrived at Paddington.
‘This is us’, Lupin said as he stood up and the train stopped. Without a word, Harry followed him out of the train, onto the platform.
It was an ordinary platform with businesspeople waiting for their train, people sitting on red benches, reading a newspaper and people running to catch their train.
Harry and Lupin went down the stairs, walked through a large hall, crammed with little stalls, then climbed up the stairs and finally reached a busy street.
Lupin inhaled the fresh air. ‘It’s not far from here. A little walk won’t hurt’, he said.
They crossed the busy street, walked several blocks, crossed another street and then turned right.
This street was less busy; there were only a few cars. It was an ordinary English neighbourhood, with nice houses and shiny cars parked in front of them.
‘It’s not this street, isn’t it?’, Harry said, observing a particular shiny and expensive cabriolet.
‘Oh, no, it’s just a little further’, Lupin answered.
Halfway down the street, Lupin turned right and slowed down.
‘This’, he said, ‘is Godric’s Hollow.’ He pointed at a sign which said “Godric’s Hollow” in fancy blue letters. Harry looked at it carefully. He wanted to go back, back to Grimmauld Place, safe and cosy. But no, not now, he said to himself, I came this far.
‘Where exactly is it?’
‘Oh, just a little further’, Lupin said. Not even a minute later, Lupin stopped abruptly.
‘Here we are, Harry.’
Harry looked up. To his right, there was a large gap between the two other houses. It was like a very big garden, but in the middle of it, there was a large, white stone, surrounded by flowers.
‘Can I - ’, Harry began.
‘Of course’, Lupin said and he looked at Harry encouragingly.
Harry felt the grass under his feet, the place where he had lived for one year. When he had finally crossed the lawn, and reached the white stone, he could see the words that were engraved in it.

In loving memory:
James Potter (°06 – 07 – 1960, † 31 – 10 – 1981)
Lily (Evans) Potter (°12 – 11 – 1960, † 31 – 10 – 1981)


Harry sat down cross-legged, facing his parents’ memorial. He didn’t know how long he sat there. It could be minutes, maybe hours. But after a while Harry felt a hand on his back and he heard a thud when Lupin sat down next to him.
And then, the words came rolling out of Harry’s mouth.
‘I’ve been thinking how it would be if they were still here.’
There was a brief silence.
‘If they would be, Sirius would still be here, too.’
‘I know, Harry. I’ve also been thinking about that.’
‘How were they like?’ Harry asked.
‘Oh, they were both very loyal. They always wanted everybody they loved to be happy.’
‘Now tell me the truth. How were they?’
Lupin smiled. ‘Well, of course they both had their less nice sides. James, for example. When he saw he had everybody’s attention, he could be quite arrogant.
‘Yeah, I noticed that’, Harry said, thinking of what he was in Dumbledore’s Pensieve two years ago.
‘Lily didn’t really have things like that. She always stuck to the rules. Unless – yes, there was this evening, our seventh year at Hogwarts. James and Lily had just started dating. James wanted her to come with him to Hogsmeade and have a romantic dinner, but she didn’t want to. She was very stubborn, but in the end, she admitted. They were almost caught when they were coming back, but they had had a lovely evening.’
Harry smiled.
‘There’s just one more thing I want to see’, he said.
‘What is it?’
‘I wanted to go to the cemetery, visit their grave.’
‘Ah, yes, of course. I think I know how we get there. Let’s go, then.’
They both got to their feet and with a final look at the memorial, they left.
The cemetery wasn’t far from Godric’s Hollow. At the entrance, they walked through a magnificent arch. After a few minutes’ search, they found James and Lilly Potter’s grave. It was a simple but beautiful double tomb. In the white stone stood engraved the same words as in the memorial stone. In front of the white stone, there were two bouquets of flowers.
Lupin stepped aside, looked around to see if anyone was watching them and waved his wand. A beautiful bouquet of flowers appeared out of thin air and Lupin gave them to Harry. He kneeled in front of the grave and placed them in the middle of it. At that moment, Harry noticed his face was wet. But it didn’t bother him, he knew Lupin understood him.
‘It’s okay, Harry. They will only be dead when they are forgotten.’

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Godverse, het lukte net zo goed, is m'n einde ik-weet-niet-hoe-loom! Ik kon de juiste zinsconstructie van die uitspraak niet vinden
NIET op de spellingsfouten letten

En nu niet zeuren, het is 4 A4-tjes lang

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Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 28-09-05 17:51

Haha ik ben trots op je Eerlijk waar!

Je doet het super

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Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 28-09-05 17:58

*heeft niet meer uitgeprint, rotding*
Leuk Ik vind je engels heel goed (het is tenminste voor mij begrijpbaar en dat zegt heel wat )
Ik wacht met smart op het volgende hoofdstuk.

(misschien ook een ideetje om hem ook te plaatsen op http://www.sugarquill.net )

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Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 28-09-05 18:09

*heeft het derde hoofdstuk nu ook gelezen*
Super

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Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 28-09-05 19:04

Kijk dat noem ik pas een lekker lang stuk! echt super geschreven. Ik zat echt soms met vochtig ogen te lezen (erg he). echt super. Ga zo door.

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Danku allemaal

Ik vind het zelf een beetje onsamenhangend omdat ik het in verschillende stukken heb geschreven (een zinnetje hier, een stukje daar), maar ben eigenlijk best wel tevreden. Hoewel, er mocht wel wat meer 'gevoel' in dat laatste stuk, vind ik

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Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 28-09-05 19:36

Ik vind het leuk geschreven... ... !! ben benieuwd naar de rest

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Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 28-09-05 20:21

wow het was het lange wachten dubbel en dwars waard
hier en daar wat kleine foutjes maar egt super zeg!!
ga zo door

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Ik vind het ook erg goed geschreven, wel wat minder dan de vorige twee stukken. Zoals je al zei vind ik het ook nogal haastig geschreven (meer spelfouten dan je vorige stukken) en een beetje kortaf (niet qua lengte, maar qua personages). Je moet je niet haasten met schrijven omdat mensen zitten te vragen om nog een deel.

JKR zou deze situatie wat anders omschreven hebben, maarja, jij bent haar niet en je hebt een eigen stijl. Alhoewel die laatste zin van je stukje ook echt typisch wat voor JKR zou zijn!

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Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 28-09-05 21:33

Ik ben behoorlijk onder de indruk van je verhaal, om meerdere redenen.
ten eerste vind ik het knap dat je in het engels schrijft en dan ook nog in behoorlijke kwaliteit engels. Er zijn her en der enkele woorden die ik slecht gekozen vind, maar dat is niet storend of zo.
ten tweede vind ik het inhoudelijk ook een goed verhaal. Ik vind het vlot genoeg, maar bij belangrijke punten sta je lang genoeg stil. En het is heerlijk een Harry Potter verhaal te lezen dat logisch aansluit en doorgaat op de boeken.
Ik hoop dat er nog meer volgt, maar neem er maar de tijd voor, om te zorgen dat het zo goed blijft.

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he super weer!
probeer er wel op de letten dat je in dezelfde tijd blijft schrijven. en let een beetje op je zinsstijl. ik kwam net een zinnetje tegen waar twee keer arrived in stond, dat stoorde me. kijk mar wat je er mee doet, ik vind het hoe dan ook een super verhaal!

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Bedankt allemaal !

Het volgende hoofdstuk wordt ook uitgebreid, dus ik ga er zeker mijn tijd voor nemen.
En Manou, er komt zeker meer, ik hoop dat ik het helemaal kan schrijven zoals ik het uitgedacht had, een heel boek dus

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eej weer super hoor!!
enne neem er idd maar de tijd voor!
je hoeft je nergens voor te haasten... !!

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Whiiiiee! Toppie weer

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Danku

Vrijdag = schrijfdag

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jeuj jeuj jeuj jeuj

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*o/* jeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeej *o/*
het werd weer tijd

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Ja, maar ik moest een heel plan maken met wat waar gebeurde, wie erin moest voorkomen, en daar ben ik ongeveer een hele namiddag mee beziggeweest
Nu ben ik alles in een hoofdstuk aan het 'gieten'.

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Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 08-10-05 14:17

doe maar rustig aan hoor Wij wachten wel We moeten nog langer wachten op het originele deel 7 dus Dit overleven we ook wel

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halloooo, de nieuwe JK rowling hebben wij hier hoor

Nee even serieus, ik vind het echt heel goed geschreven,de spelfouten vallen mij niet op.

Go on writing please!

Yasmine

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Danku, danku

Ik ben druk bezig

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hmm die bedoelde ik eigenlijk niet,

ik kan de goede niet meer vinden

naja wat ik bedoel is,
wanneer komt je volgende stukje?

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Als het af is, en dat kan nog wel even duren, ik heb veel schoolwerk ...

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Link naar dit bericht Geplaatst: 11-10-05 12:18

ach neem de tijd
laat je niet ophaasten ofzo.. idd wat Sieltjuh zegt... op t echte deel 7 moeten we nog veel langer wachten!