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mijn eerste gedicht, het moest eigenlijk een songtekst zijn maja daar had ik helemaal geen talent voor 
Oja en voor mensen die goed wakker zijn: nee een dags vilnders bestaan niet. Maar daar heb ik met een reden voor gekozen.
Wat vinden jullie ervan?
Wil graag wat tips/ aanpassingen !!
One day butterfly
I’m staring at the window
with a tear in my eye
thinking about the time we spend
together in this life
It started like a fairytale
You in my life
You made me feel so happy than
you made me feel alive
you told me it’s forever babe
I’ll never leave your side
You and me together it was ment to be
You and me together was like a butterfly
Gentle and beautiful, happy and peaceful
It felt like we could fly, and see the world together
just like a butterfly
All the things you said to me
It feels like one big lie
The night you cheated on me
A peace of me died
It never crossed my mind you would hurt me so
The one I loved and trusted, just lied
You asked me to give you my heart again
With the promise I will change my love
The one I want is you
I believed every you said
I never thougt you would hurt me again
The reason I never lost hope for us,
was my endless love for you
You and me together it was ment to be
You and me together was like a butterfly
Gentle and beautiful, happy and peaceful
It felt like we could fly, and see the world together
just like a butterfly
But when I gave my heart to you
You stepped on it again
You cheated, lied to me and made me scared
It was to much pain, a never ending lie
And than I knew this will only end
If I’ll let you go my butterfly
I gave up hope for us..
This is where the story ended like a one day butterfly...
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) zit alleen 1 klein foutje in, het is niet a PEACE of me died, maar a PIECE of me died 
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