Geplaatst Ik ben fanatiek de laatste dagen, na de tekst 'To an anonymous love' ben ik door gaan schrijven, en hier is dus mijn 2e probeersel.
Ik vind 'm aardig goed in elkaar zitten, maar als er nog tips en verbeteringen zijn..graag! (Ben pas 12, dat verklaart een hoop
)Ik heb er nog geen meldoie bij, dus ook daarmee advies gevraagd
Here it is:
All what's left
Is this all what's left
This mess of thought and words
The chaos, the war
Of everything that hurts
Is this all what's left
Of you and me together
Split, Broken
I thought our love was better
Chorus:
While your eyes meet mine
and you said it was all fine
I knew you was lying
Bit I'm not gonna waste my time crying
Now, this is it then
This is all what's left
Is this all what's left
That single tear in my eye
And a lot of anger
this was the last goodbye
Is this all what's left
A few footsteps in the sand
A couple of broken glasses
your marks on my hand
Chorus
When you hold my hand
and said it was ok
When you said I have to stop
keep on searching for a better way
You did it, while you looked straight into my eyes
You just did it, you told those fiets lies
Well, now keep your apologise
I think leaving you is more than wise
Chorus
Sommige stukjes lopen voor geen meter, vooral die laatste coupletten (Bridge)
Dus daarom tips gevraagd
Liefs
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