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**Geplaatst door de TopicStarter** : 29-06-09 21:14

[VER] The Red Scarf Killer. [18+]

Geplaatst door de TopicStarter : 29-06-09 21:14

Hallo allemaal,

Ik schrijf al heel wat jaren Engelse verhaaltjes, maar deel deze bijna nooit op een paar mensen na. Ik ben nu aan een nieuw verhaal begonnen, en wou deze eigenlijk wel delen. Ik plaatst een kort stukje en als de reacties positief zijn dan plaats ik misschien nog wat meer.

Ik zou het heel fijn vinden om opbouwend commentaar te verkrijgen, met name op de spelling en grammatica in mijn Engels. Met hulp van veel sites heb ik mezelf een beetje Engels geleerd en schrijf ik alles eigenlijk van uit mijn gevoel met de nodige grammatica fouten, dus graag commentaar!

Het verhaal legt zichzelf als het ware uit, en die 18+ heb ik er eigenlijk alleen maar in gezet omdat het later misschien wat te wordt voor jonge bokkers. Nou ik ben benieuwd!

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Chapter one.

It was her job you know, saving people.

It was her life and she knew she could never change that. But she would never grow used to the effects of her work on her personal life, and she would never get used to the gruesome things she faced every day. FBI Agent Jody Megan Halliwell was a tough girl, but not even she could sleep without facing nightmares of the every day drama’s she saw. The death that surrounded her work place, the smell of blood and the feeling of fear cross your heart. The tragedy she witnessed everyday would drive many crazy, but Jody knew she had to face it. She knew she had lives to save and people to rescue. ‘Till the bitter damn end. The faces of serial killers haunted her every night, and she knew she would never sleep without a gun on her bedside table again. It wasn’t until she heard her name that she was drawn back to reality.

“Miss Halliwell? Miss Halliwell?”

The sound of the older woman in the seat across her made the blonde look up from her vision at the ground. “I’m sorry, I didn’t hear you, could you please repeat the question?” she was seated in a luxery sofa in a white room with a window or two. A black desk and the leather chair, a few bookcases with studies on human behaviour and personality and it’s disorders. Her tired blue eyes landed upon the face of the woman that had called her name. She forced a weak and tired smile before regretting the action immediately.

“Is there something wrong miss Halliwell? Are you feeling alright?”

‘Damn it..’ the blonde thought to herself as she faced the woman, the old witch was onto her. She hated coming here, but her boss had demanded it, and she could hardly deny an order from the FBI could she? With a soft sigh she shook her head and once more forced a smile onto her pink full lips and straightened herself as she faced the woman.

“I’m fine Mrs Kardigan, just a little tired, really,”

She had no idea how the words rolled out of her mouth like a sweet little lie as she glanced over at the Sesame Street clock and relief hit her body. Time was up and she didn’t waste a second and got up, grabbing her things which earned her a disapproving look from the woman in the leather chair.

“I will see you next week Miss Halliwell, same time and same place. Don’t forget!” the woman called after her as Jody exited the room and closed the door.

“How could I?” she muttered as her eyes flashed at the sign that said psychologist on it. Weekly therapy was really, really useless if you asked her. She sighed and got moving.

**Geplaatst**: 30-06-09 06:40

Re: [VER] The Red Scarf Killer. [18+]

Geplaatst: 30-06-09 06:40

Zoals in de regels van Uit de Kunst te lezen is, moet een verhaal in delen minimaal bestaan uit 1500 woorden per deel --> [UK] Welkom op [UK] Uit de Kunst
Dit is hier niet het geval, daarom plaats ik hier een slotje.

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