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**Geplaatst door de TopicStarter** : 23-01-09 13:44

[VER] Twilight-Related : My Story

Geplaatst door de TopicStarter : 23-01-09 13:44

hierbij mijn verhaal.
omdat mensen uit het twilight topic het graag wouden lezen.
enjoy

Proloog:
I could never describe this feeling as something common, it was just so much more than that.
It was nowhere near an adrenaline rush, miles away from tripping on a heroine shot and It Almost felt like being wrapped in a warm blanket created by a bonfire.

No, it felt like I was put on a stake, burning for everything that i had done wrong, for all of my mistakes. It was like fire going through my body, shutting down every vein of my body, absorbing my blood.
I felt like screaming but no scream would come past my lips, not even a little whimper.

Everyone i would miss, i would see dying of old age, everyone i would love was fading after all of this was over and done.

I am melissa and this is my story.

Chapter one:
When I woke up, nobody was there, all I could see was the mirror they placed in front of the bed I was laying on.
I was scared of the way my body seemed to be moving, so perfect.
I was shocked about the fact that my body was able to move.

All that I could remember was the fact that I got hit by a car, that I was laying on the road completely broken.
I wasn’t able to move myself to keep from being run over more, I couldn’t even crawl for safety.
I was left to die there on that road, and then there it was, his perfect pale face with these golden eyes.

I looked at the mirror and felt as if I was frozen to the ground, this wasn’t me. The woman staring back from the mirror couldn’t be me, this woman had pale skin and blood red eyes.
The long, blond curls and the clothes covered in blood, that was the only part that was left of me that I recognised.
“No, no this is not possible, I am..,” I cut myself of mid sentence when I heard my voice.
It was like music to my ears, but it wasn’t my voice, not even close.
I picked up the mirror and threw it against the wall, overwhelmed with my own sudden strength.

I searched the house, no one was there. When I walked into the living room I was stunned by the beauty of the room. The way the glass walls made it look so open, I just couldn’t believe it, I was dead after all.
I walked out the back door, within just a few minutes I was surrounded by the forest.
The new smell that came into my nose made my mouth water, it made my throat feel as if it was burning. I followed it, the scent made me go into the woods further and there it was, an open space with a beautiful little girl sitting in the middle of it.
She made me come closer, I was careful not to make a sound.
Before the little girl even knew it, she was dead, I was at her throat sucking out all of her blood.
It made me feel good, it made me feel stronger.
That feeling only lasted until I heard his voice, I dropped the girl and turned around.
“What do you think your doing ? ”

Credit To Vikki @ Bokt Voor De Spellings controle Enz Dankje

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**Geplaatst**: 23-01-09 13:47

Geplaatst: 23-01-09 13:47

Er zijn er toch een paar doorheen geglipt Twi...

Ik zie oa weer kleine i-tjes...

Als je het hele verhaal klaar hebt, dan moet je het trouwens maar eens e-mailen, en dan ga ik er echt uitgebreid voor zitten

. Nu zijn het nog de ruwe schetsjes he...

Ik weet trouwens lekker al hoe het verder gaat... O:)

. Snel je volgende hoofdstuk pb'en hoor!

**Geplaatst**: 23-01-09 13:48

Geplaatst: 23-01-09 13:48

Eindelijk!

Het is een klein stukje, maar ik ben benieuwd hoe het verder gaat!

Citaat:
felt like screaming but no scream would come past my lips, not even a little whimper.

Ik denk dat je met whimper, whisper bedoelt?

**Geplaatst door de TopicStarter** : 23-01-09 13:49

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Geplaatst door de TopicStarter : 23-01-09 13:49

even de bovenste post aangepast.., neej moet whimper zijn

@ vikki hihi welke dan :p

**Geplaatst**: 23-01-09 13:52

Geplaatst: 23-01-09 13:52

I would see dying of old age moet bv I would see die of old age zijn... Tenzij de personage letterlijke het daadwerkelijk sterven zou zien...

Whimper bestaat ook Nanne

. Ik zou hier en dara trouwens ook het woordje "just" weg halen Twi, die gebruik je echt heel erg veel

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**Geplaatst**: 23-01-09 13:52

Geplaatst: 23-01-09 13:52

Mag ik dan even de uberdomme vraag stellen wat whimper betekend?

Verder vind ik het wel leuk om te lezen!

I like it!

**Geplaatst**: 23-01-09 13:56

Geplaatst: 23-01-09 13:56

Ik vind dat we niet echt een mooie vertaling hebben voor whimper, maar het woordenboek maakt er gedrein, zacht gejank van... het is zeg maar een zacht klaag geluidje. Nu ik meer ingelezen ben zou ik "It was nowhere near an adrenaline rush" veranderen in bv "The feeling was more intense than an adrenaline rush"... Ik zal van het weekend even opnieuw voor alles gaan zitten als je wil, ik kan mezelf nog wel verbeteren...

Ik pb je wel even mijn e-mail adres zodat jet het ook kan e-mailen, dan kruip ik lekker met een printje en een pen op de bank.

Het wordt nog leuker trouwens Nanne...

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**Geplaatst**: 23-01-09 13:57

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Geplaatst: 23-01-09 13:57

Okee thanks Vikki!

**Geplaatst door de TopicStarter** : 23-01-09 13:59

Re: [Ver] Twilight-Related : My Story

Geplaatst door de TopicStarter : 23-01-09 13:59

haha ik zou het niet gebruiken als het niet bestond

**Geplaatst**: 23-01-09 14:06

Geplaatst: 23-01-09 14:06

Aah goed geschreven! ben benieuwd naar het volgende hoofdstuk!

**Geplaatst door de TopicStarter** : 23-01-09 21:30

Geplaatst door de TopicStarter : 23-01-09 21:30

Voor De Fans die eht wel lezen

Hfst 2 en 3

Chapter Two

I didn’t answer him, but just looked him in the eye. It was him, it was the one who found me at the scene of the car accident.
All these thoughts went through my head, I couldn’t stop thinking.
And then it hit me, he did it. He made me what I am now, this horrible monster.
I snarled and then took a jump at him, pinning him to the ground, I was a lot stronger than he was.
“What did you do to me, what did you do!” I yelled while squeezing his throat with one hand. I was so filled with rage, that I never heard the others approaching me from behind.
Before I knew it, they had me pinned to the ground. Luckily I was stronger so i broke loose from their grasp and just ran.

I kept running, I just couldn’t stop.
While I raced around the place, my mind was racing as well, I didn't want to be this monster.
What can I do to kill myself, what can I do to stop myself from killing people.
All of the sudden I stoped and just sat down, if I would have been able to cry, I would have cried.
I hated myself even more for killing that inocent little girl. I picked up all the rocks around me and threw them away. They hit the ground miles away.

I probably sat there for hours, nobody came to search me.
Then I smelled something new, it was different to the scent of the little girl, but it still made me stand up and go after it. When I got closer I saw my prey, a huge grizzly bear that was hunting for fish in the river.
I ran towards the bear and launched myself at it, putting on a fight with the huge animal.
Normaly I wouldn’t have been a match, but now it could have never gone any easier.
I put my teeth on it's neck and bit my way through his thick fur and neck muscles, I was happy to be drinking this huge animal's blood instead of the blood of the fragile little girl a lot of hours earlier.
When I was done, I felt saturated and started thinking about going back to the huge house.
I made up my mind and went back, just walking this time.

After a few minutes I was there and knocked on the door, I was nervous to hear what they would say.
I heard somebody say “come in” and walked through the door. I walked to the living room and saw them sitting there, looking relaxed and normal.
I took a deep breath and sat myself down “i am sorry’ I heard myself murmer in a low voice.
I was disappointed in myself, and let all my emotions pour out: “Why couldn’t you just leave me there, now I just killed this innocent little girl, I am a horrible person, I never want to do it again”. I was babbeling on and on about how sorry I was and they just let me talk.

After I was finished, the woman came to sit beside me and patted my back for comfort.
“It was never your fault, nobody was here to restrain you honey, just let me get you some clean clothes and you can let everything rest.”
Before I knew it, I was upstairs with the other woman. “I am Kyra, now let me get you some clothes” she said.

Chapter Three:
After I finished getting dressed, she gently combed my hair which made feel me much more comfortable.
I still whished I could cry, to let all my emotions pour out. Kyra was still comforting me. “You couldn’t help that the little girl was there, she was at the wrong place at the wrong time” she said.
I looked at her and smiled a little, I sighed and let my mind wander again. I was still in grief and still looking for a way to make myself feel better.
“How can you stand it, killing people to eat?” I asked and in response she looked at me and smiled “we don’t eat humans honey, we hunt animals you see, we all can’t stand killing people” she said.
It made me feel a little better to know that they would take care of me.

When we were done, we went downstairs to the living room again, I was wearing jeans and a comfortable tshirt
I just stood there and looked out the window, I knew they were staring at me but I didn't move. My throat was burning again, it did not make it easier just to stand here.
I looked around, unable to understand why they were so nice to me. I was horrible, I was a monster.
After hours of standing there, I went to the couch and sat down. I saw the boy sitting and staring at me. “Why did you do this to me? I am horrible, I would rather have died there on that road.” I said in a quiet voice. He looked at me and said nothing.
I lost control, and stood up and said in an angry voice
“why don’t you tell me ! Or else I will just kill myself.”
“You can’t kill yourself” he said in a voice so low I thought only I could hear it.
“So why did you do this to me?” I asked with a disgusted tone in my voice.
“You were too perfect, I couldn’t just let you die while you would have had a whole future ahead of you.” He responded.

I just stood up and walked away, I didn’t know where I was going, but I simply needed to get away from him. I realised I didn’t even know his name.
I was walking through the forest again, not knowing that I was being followed this time. I started to run to try to empty my mind from all the things that had happened to me.
I didn’t know where I was going or what I was going to do, I just needed some alone time.
After running for what seemed to be miles, I stoped and sat down.
After a few minutes the man appeared form behind the trees and sat down next to me. “Can’t you just go away” I shouted at him. “Just leave me alone allright !!”
He quietly sat there, ignoring my shouting and waiting for me to calm down. “Jason doesn't mean it like that you know. He could not possibly let you die when all he wanted to do was to save you.” He said in a soothing voice.
“You are already very special to him, he likes you, that's why he did it.”
“Oh...” that was all I could say and all of a sudden my rage disappeared.
“If it hadn't been for his unusually strong attraction to you, he wouldn't have done it. He would have let you lay there to die if he could, so you would have had a beautiful funeral and everything.” He said. I looked at his face and it just silenced me.
“Sorry” was all that I could say. I had no idea that the boy, Jason, felt that way.
“I think we need to go back, I can smell humans” he said and took my arm.
“Yes, let's go” was all I said in return. I didn’t want to kill an another one.

**Geplaatst**: 23-01-09 21:45

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Geplaatst: 23-01-09 21:45

Best leuk verhaal, zo!
Ben benieuwd hoe het verder gaat.

**Geplaatst**: 23-01-09 21:46

Geplaatst: 23-01-09 21:46

Twi ik vind het een leuk verhaal!

Ga vooral door met posten en schrijven!

**Geplaatst**: 23-01-09 21:49

Geplaatst: 23-01-09 21:49

Woow nice story

**Geplaatst door de TopicStarter** : 23-01-09 21:50

Geplaatst door de TopicStarter : 23-01-09 21:50

dank jullie wel

en dan te bedenken dat er nog heel wat te wachten staat xD

**Geplaatst**: 23-01-09 22:02

Geplaatst: 23-01-09 22:02

gaaf verhaal kan niet wachten op de rest

**Geplaatst door de TopicStarter** : 25-01-09 12:32

Geplaatst door de TopicStarter : 25-01-09 12:32

hierbij 4 en 5
Credit aan vikki

Chapter four:
betreffende liedje

When we got back, Kyra was waiting for us. We sat down at the kitchen table and they talked, while I was in my personal bubble.
Kyra whispered softely "Will, you know we have to get Melissa her own room".
So that was the man's name, Will.
I heard them, but I never responded to anything they said about me being allowed to decorate the room to my own personal taste.
I would be able to create my own personal space, I really liked the idea of that.
I just stared at the table and never noticed that they adressed me,
“Mellisa, what do you think?” Will said to me. My head snapped up and I looked at him. “Yeah, that’s allright with me" I responded, without really recalling what he had said to me.

I just started wandering around the house when I heard music I thought I recognized. I walked towards the sound, not knowing where it came from, and I heard strangely familiar lyrics: “I missed you till you almost took my sanity, I am starting a new verse like poetry”. Before I even knew it, I was in this room.
It was beautiful and the music kept playing “hiding behind the words you speak
changing the words of the story, you say you don't love me , then say that you love me
I'm fighting” that's when I recognized it, it was my favorite band.
For a moment I wondered were they got the cd’s from, then I sat down and listened closely.
I even enjoyed myself, not at all aware that Jason was doing this for me. I listened with my eyes closed, relaxing at the sound of the beautiful music.

I probably sat there for hours just listening, softly singing along to all the songs.
It made me feel like I was back home, sitting in my cosy room. The music stopped and when I looked up, I saw Jason standing there. I smiled a little.
“Thank you” I said and he smiled back at me.
“I am sorry I made you feel this horrible Melissa, but I couldn’t let you die” he responded.
“I know, I know” I murmered. I stood up to put the music back on and then I sat down again.
He came to sit beside me, listening to the music over and over again. I didn’t know if he liked it or not, I assumed he didn’t care.
After a while Will and Kyra came in, looking suprised to see us sitting there together.
“Well you found your room” Kyra said to me.
“Thank you” I mouthed and I smiled a little.

For the first time after having been transformed, I was feeling happy. Everybody seemed happy.
After the music stopped playing, they gave me a catalogue for an online furniture and decorations company. “Just pick anything you want or like, money isn’t a problem” Will said to me. I was very surprised, back home we didn’t have much money, we could barely make ends meet.
The sheriff's officer was at our door weekly, asking about money and threathening that he would kick us out of our house or take all of our stuff if we didn't pay.
No, living back home had not been easy, but I had loved every second of it.

Chapter Five:
I walked around the house, feeling much more comfortable, singing to myself once in a while.
The relationship with Jason was slowly improving, even though he sometimes still thought he made a very bad choice when he decided to change me. Sometimes I would agree with him, sometimes I wouldn't.
It was a normal day in the week, Will and Kyra went out and Jason and I stayed in the house.
I was in my room staring out of the window, I was bored without even knowing why.

I walked out of my room and out of the house, I walked through the forrest and started to run again. I loved to run, it made me feel free.
Free of everything i had to deal with, I went to my usual spot and sat down.
My spot was a little open space next to the river, where no sunlight came through the trees.
Nobody came here but me, at least that was what I thought.
I closed my eyes and layed down on the forrest ground, the scent of my surroundings smelled good to me.
I layed there, emptying my mind when a new scent drifted towards me, I quickly got up and traced it.
I looked around a big tree and saw a man sitting there, he smelled so good to me.
Different possibilities crossed my mind; would kill him, turn around and go, eat him or just run...
I felt confused, my thirst was something I couldn’t control yet.
My mind went blank and I slowly moved closer, he didn’t notice me circling around him.
I was as silent as the night, quietly approaching the man.
When I was there beside him, I trailed my finger on his skin, it made his skin crawl.
He was stunned with horror and I just smiled at him. Before the man could even think of screaming, he was dead too.
The human blood made me feel so much stronger, I felt stronger and more in control.
He was empty way too soon, I grinned and dropped him to the ground.
I felt so good, so full.

I took 2 steps back and then the reality of what I had done hit me, I was struck with horror.
I screamed and ran away, feeling upset with myself. I was obviously not strong enough to control myself.
How could I possibly go into the forest at daylight, I was wrong, I wanted to die.
I ran away from the horrible scene, and found myself back home in less than 5 minutes, coming to a halt in my room. I was a monster !!
My mind was racing, trying to come up with ways ofhow I could kill myself, maybe Icould tear myself apart.
I stood up and before I even knew it, I was pinned to the wall by Jason,
“don’t hurt yourself, try to calm down Melissa” he said into my ear.
I was filled with rage and threw Jason across the room, a snarl coming through my teeth. “Leave me alone!” I shouted.
“I won’t leave you alone, you have to calm down right now” he said with a soft voice.
“Go!! Before I kill you, I am horrible !!” I still shouted.
Jason didn’t go away that night, not leaving my side. I just sat in the corner all night, holding myself together with my arms.
Again Ii wished that tears could stream down my cheeks, but I only managed to keep making noices that sounded like sobbing.
I was a mess, my mind was a mess, my body was a mess, I felt torn apart.

**Geplaatst**: 28-01-09 10:46

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Geplaatst: 28-01-09 10:46

goed geschreven ! ben beniuewd:P als ie helemaal af is moet je maar even emailen kan ik hem nog beter voor gaan zitten.

**Geplaatst**: 28-01-09 11:09

Geplaatst: 28-01-09 11:09

Toch geen last van een writer's block he Twi? Ik heb al een tijdje niets gezien...

**Geplaatst door de TopicStarter** : 28-01-09 18:27

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Geplaatst door de TopicStarter : 28-01-09 18:27

beetje vikki / geen tijd hahahaha was toen die week vrij xD

**Geplaatst**: 28-01-09 22:19

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Geplaatst: 28-01-09 22:19

Hahaha, don't we just all love Twilight?

Achja, meiden houden nu eenmaal van dramatische liefde en perfecte jongens.

Leuk verhaal, je moet wel op je spelling en grammatica letten want het is soms erg lastig te volgen. Maar ik denk dat het echt wat kan worden, als je maar niet te veel aan de boeken/film vasthoud.

**Geplaatst door de TopicStarter** : 02-02-09 10:47

Geplaatst door de TopicStarter : 02-02-09 10:47

hierbij 6 en 7

6 vind ik geweldig en 7 niks hahaha vandaar dat die erg kort is.
met hfst 7 had ik last van writers block en dan tja

hfst 8 daarin tegen wordt geweldig he Vikkki

Chapter Six:
I locked myself up in my room more often than was necessary, because I felt guilty towards the others.
My plan was to stay in my room, hold my breath and never come out again. I was hoping that eventually they would find me in a corner of my room, looking like a statue and covered with dust.
They felt as horrible as I did, not knowing what to do with me, aware of the mess I was right now.
I screamed at them a thousand times or more, asking them just to lock me up or to kill me, to get me out of here.
It would have been less dangerous to kill me than have me on the loose, killing even more people.

I had been there for over a month when Kyra entered my room and took me by my hand and walked downstairs with me. She sat me down on the couch, and looked at me. Determined not to return her gaze, I looked towards the ground.
“Melissa, please look at us” Will said to me. His voice was strong but comforting at the same time. I looked up, but I was too scared to look him in the eye.
Kyra, who was sitting next to me, gently stroked my back and softly whispered in my ear “he’s not mad, he is just desparate to find a way to change this situation”. I nodded and slowly I shifted my gaze to look Will in the eye.
He smiled a bit “Melissa, we are going to make sure we keep everybody safe from you from now on” he said. My mind was yelling yes, yes! Please do that!!
“Every one of us is going to take you hunting some time during the week, more than once if that is necessary” he continued.
I nodded again. “You are going to be protected from yourself, you are going to get through it Melissa, I know it.” Will said and looked at me with a smile.
I smiled back at him. “Thank you” was all I could say.

Kyra was the first one to take me hunting. Before we got going, she checked the forest to make sure she would take me to an area where there were no humans. As soon as she had found a good area where only animals roamed around, she came to get me. We immediately started running deeper into the forest. “The area where we are going is full of mountain lions an bears, you will love it” Kyra said to me while we were still running.
Within 10 minutes we had reached our destination, the scent that was all around the place was mouth watering.
I had been thirsty for a long time, this was going to make me feel better.
I let all my self control fade, allowing my senses to grow stronger as I strode towards the strong scent of bears.
My self controle was gone, I surrendered myself to my new found instinct. The bear was huge,his strong muscles showing through his thick, furry coat. Knowing that I had found a perfect meal, I soundlessy approached him and then I jumped on the bear's back. He was annoyed right away. I grinned and tried to irritate him even more, I jumped up and down his back. It was a fun game, confusing the bear and making him think that I was the prey, that he was hunting me, while it was in fact the other way around. After a few minutes I got tired of this game and I jumped on his back, putting my teeth at this throath, biting my way through the thick fur and the skin and flesh that was underneath.
When his blood came past my lips, I couldn’t stop, it was delicious. I felt my strength come back to me. When I was done, Kyra was next to me, pulling me further into the woods, towards the more mountainous area. That was when I saw the huge mountain lion, he was sleeping on a rock, his tail curled up beside him.
I liked this one even more, I went to huge lion and poked him in the side with my foot.
I liked to play with my food, I could hear Kyra's laughter and grinned even more.
When I wasn't paying attention, the lion woke up. I must have really irritated him, because he growled and took a jump, landing right on top of me. I was stronger and kicked him off me, that was when the cat and mouse game began.
I jumped on a rock and he jumped right after me. When I was still human, I would not have stood a chance against such an animal, but the new me was faster and even more lethal than that stupid lion.
After 30 minutes I grew tired of the game and jumped on his back as if he was a horse. I bit him in the neck and drank his blood.
I felt completely full after this mountain lion, so I sat down on a rock and waited for Kyra to come and take me back home.

Chapter Seven:
They surprised me by coming into my room with huge smiles on their faces.
“Happy birthday” Kyra said to me. I was confused and I counted in my head, “it's not my birthday, that was 5 months ago, and I stopped aging anyway” I responded in a confused tone of voice.
That's when Jason stepped in “it's your first birthday after becoming one of us" he said with a lot of excitement in his voice.
“Oh” was all I could say, thinking back of the disaster my first year had been, I had been out of control so often that they had to protect me from myself.
“Well, we think you deserved something, something special.” Will said to me. I smiled a bit and waited. “We don’t know if you like it or not but your present is in the living room” Will continued. I raced downstairs and gazed at the huge piano that was next to the staircase, I loved it.
Pieces of my human live came back to me once in a while,

My mother taught me how to play, she was a pianist herself.
I loved to hear her play, I would just lay on the ground and hum to the tune she was playing. When she didn’t feel like playing, I would manipulate her till she gave in and played for me anyway.

“Thank you!” I shouted over and over again. “It's no problem honey, Jason tracked down your old house and started digging in your past and found out about this. We would love to hear you play.” Kyra said.
I smiled brightly and sat down at the piano and started playing claire de lune by debussi.
They smiled at me, looking extremely happy. I felt better than ever.
I played into the late hours, playing every song I could remember. I stopped when it was around twelve and then went away with Jason.
Jason taught me about the history of the vampires, there were so many different life styles for the different vampires, most of whom of course had humans as their diet.
And then he told me about the Volutari. I was amazed by their story and wanted to know more about them and what their gifts were. He told me everything form the wives to the guards. I loved it, maybe one day I would be able to meet them.

**Geplaatst**: 02-02-09 11:46

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Geplaatst: 02-02-09 11:46

Is het de bedoeling dat het veel op Twilight lijkt, of niet?

**Geplaatst door de TopicStarter** : 02-02-09 11:49

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Geplaatst door de TopicStarter : 02-02-09 11:49

beetje beet, ik schrijf gewoon op wat mij leuke wendingen lijkt enz.

**Geplaatst**: 02-02-09 11:50

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Geplaatst: 02-02-09 11:50

Ja, zoiets dacht ik al.

Misschien moet je dan proberen om een paar details te veranderen e.d. Bijvoorbeeld door een ander lied te kiezen dan Claire de Lune, dat soort dingen doen mij iig erg aan Twilight denken en ik meen te begrijpen dat dat toch niet helemaal de bedoeling is.

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